If you feel like the thesis could still use some work, then please type an alternate thesis above your main body paragraph, but make sure to label the two: Alt. Thesis and MBP to avoid confusion.
Reply: Offer one of your classmates some constructive criticism on his/her response to the initial post. Please avoid commenting on grammar and focus more on ideas (e.g. One of your ideas in the main body paragraph is well supported, but there are two ideas rather than one, and the second is not as well supported and could be eliminated).
The manner in which the woman is flexing could be a revealing component that delivers several messages. It seems to state that in this new role, women will be asked to perform tasks that were formally held by men. She's also rolling up her sleeve, adding that the time for this work is now. But what the reader might see is that while she's in a flexed pose her muscle is relaxed, demonstrating her ability to retain grace in an unfamiliar circumstance. This flexing position sends a robust emotional appeal to women.
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DeleteIn the poster " We Can Do It" the lady seems to be flexing her arm. This could be viewed as a visual signal of strength. She seems to look proud which would indicate this is a new concept to her, and other women could do it as well. She is stating women were capable of taking on a man's role in the factory and would have to step up and do so.
ReplyDeleteMisty your paragraph is good but also very basic and vague. I believe you should give more language into your paragraph for the audience to have a clear understanding
DeleteI would avoid the word "seems" making it vague. I would recommend making it a factual statement. Or possibly express what made you notice that she is flexing. The woman was holding her arm in the way that you could see her bicep, as she was held the sleeve of her jumpsuit to exude strength, in her new role as a factory worker.
DeleteThe clothing worn by the woman in the propaganda poster expresses patriotism through the use of its colors derived from the American Flag. The sense of pride in the woman’s expression draws the attention to the red and white polka dot bandanna designed to replace stylish hairstyles of its time. As one scrolls from top to bottom, the attention leaves the red bandana to the blue jumpsuit which also represents the working class woman. As a symbolism in which the American Flag represents, “One Nation Under God”, it brought strength to the American woman to come together to support their country.
ReplyDeleteI think you do a great job sticking to one point and explaining it. I might try to change the repetitive words up just a bit though. I see woman used a lot so maybe you could word it so it isn't used quite so much. Good paragraph though!
DeleteThe image of this woman in the poster has machismo written all over
ReplyDeleteit. She's rolling up her sleeves. Hair tied back with a bandanna,
broad shoulders, slim waist and no make-up. With four basic words
ended with an exclamation point she exemplifies what is needed
from the American women during this particular time of the war.
Mark, it's funny you said this poster has "machismo written all over it." Every point you mentioned is well observed commentary, however, you might run short on word count if those ideas aren't busted down further. Check Professor Taylor's directions real quick again and notice how she says, "center around only one idea in the paragraph," it might help with such little amount of material to analyze. Alright dude, kevin
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ReplyDeleteIn the "We Can Do It" poster, the woman's flexed arm and her attire make her appear tough and completely capable of doing a job typically done by men, while looking somewhat feminine still. This could cause more women to lean towards that route and give them a sense of pride for contributing to the war cause.
ReplyDeleteFrom the beginning of time to present day, there has always been a double standard between women and men. During this specific era, women were only considered in a domestic role. This poster catches the attention of both sexes but can be viewed in different perspectives. Some men can view the poster as "just a pretty woman flexing" however to the woman this poster can be seen as empowering, strong, motivation and determination. This iconic poster were seen as inspirational to all women to create a balance between the role of a wife and working life outside the home today.
ReplyDeleteThe need for women in the work force became clear in the 1940s during the second World War. In the image depicted is a woman rolling her sleeve and flexing her bicep showing the need of willing women to fill in the roles left behind by the men. Most of these jobs were industrial positions with hard manual labor constructed around males. The phrase, "We Can Do It!" plays as a call to action for women and states that the barriers of sex difference no longer matter. Both these characteristics of the propaganda show the vitality of women in the work force to ensure industrial progression.
ReplyDeleteQade44, I know you're probably more concerned with the RA of a Visual draft, but these are my comments on your blog. Your topic sentence is supported with evidence, but in two particular circumstances, the wording could be more efficient. When you are talking about labor previously done by males, and now needed to be done by women, the language says "constructed around males." Maybe after the wording "manual labor," use traditionally suited for males. After "We can do it," the words "plays as," could probably be replaced with "is," to keep matters simpler. After that, you got a great clincher, something i missed, maybe you could help me out.
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